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„She smiled down at him. “Python,” she whispered. “They call me Python.“

Who is they? I thought she didn’t even leave the house 💀
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„Shadera's finger twitched on the trigger, but she held her fire. Something in his confidence made her hesitate.“

Literally why would she hesitate? It doesn’t matter what he knows, she could just find out afterwards

„It’s over, Father,” Greyson said. “Your Heart is broken.“

That sounds so dumb💀

„This is a day of great celebration, a promise of a brighter future for our great city. Unity between rings.“

This does not make any sense to me 😭 like he does not give a shit about unity between the rings

„Bullet wounds. So many bullet wounds.“

Which she survived how? Why are we acting like Bilder wounds aren’t incredibly fatal, especially when they’re all on the torso?

What tf are these „plot twists“ 💀

„The princess of the kingdom finally coming to play with the big boys,” Kestrel said, a smirk tugging at one corner of her mouth. “Welcome to the rebellion, Lira Serel. I was wondering when you’d come to the dark side.“

Full Body cringe💀💀

„Lira Serel stepped into view, maskless“

But how would they recognize Lira if she only ever wears a mask??😭😭

„If you shoot me,” he said, his voice dropping, “it will only make me want to fuck you.“

😟😟😟 huhhh?

„Careful, Shade.” His voice lowered to a dangerous register. “You’re starting to sound like you care.“

Ugh I fucking HATE this line😒 it’s so overdone

„Am I?” Greyson countered. “The serial numbers all begin with SIG02. Serel Industries, my initial, second son. My personal division.“

But why would he smuggle contraband with his fucking name on it??😭😭

„Shadera moved before she could reconsider, pushing between the two men, her hands against their chests, forcing them apart.
“Stop it,” she barked. “Both of you.“

„Stawwp you guys, this isn’t you!🥺“, y/n cried, her small but luscious frame caught between the two men that were flaunt daggers at each other.

„He took a step closer, pulling the bottle from her hand and taking a swig before handing it back.“

Oh! So we’re sharing the bottle Shadera just drank out of, after she threw up😃

„I made it how you like it,” he said, gesturing to the tea. An attempt to get her to drink. “Three stirs counterclockwise.“

💀💀💀 tf kinda tea is this where you can TASTE the amount of time and the direction it was stirred

b) there are no lyrics to the song and it’s only description is that it’s „the song of defiance, hope and unity“
c) this supposed song of rebellion was NEVER mentioned before even ONCE
d) you’re not even TWENTY (20!) percent into the book💀💀💀

Nooo you can’t just make a scene were oppressed characters randomly start singing soulfully if a) you did not create a plausible enough context for why these people would suddenly defy orders, all for a girl who has been in that prison for like an hour, talked to only one other person and whose crime is a FAILED (!!) assassination

„Then, out of the quiet a woman’s voice, thin but determined, began to sing.“

💀💀💀💀 ain’t no way

„It would be the ultimate display of power,” Lira added. “Showing that even their deadliest weapon can be tamed by the Heart.“

First of all, how would they know that she’s their „deadliest weapon“??? For all they know she could just be a disposable member of the Daggermouths that only got this far through dumb luck?

Secondly, THIS IS SO FUCKING STUPID TF KINDA REASONING IS THAT???

„it could benefit us. A political union between the Heart and the Boundary. It would send a message that even the most violent resistance can be brought to heel.“

Hääääääääh??? They literally publicly execute people that have relationships outside of their caste, so what kind of message would that marriage bring except that the elite are hypocritical pieces of shit??

„and a breedable daughter that seemed to steal all of his spine at her conception.“

Both content and grammar wise this sentence sucks ass

Huh? Greyson doesn’t even know Shadera‘s name yet, so why is he using it in his pov??

„she always kept a razor blade tucked behind her ear“

How are the logistics of that?🤨

Counted a total of 18 spelling, grammar or punctuation mistakes😬 definitely could have been edited some more

„And her heartbeat was a faint, barely-there echo.“

Bro her plot armor is crazyyy💀 you’re telling me after that she still ain’t dead??

„My father—and I—had been wrong about many things“

Bro just noticed?

„Give us the boulder!” His voice was shrill with desperation.
“No—fuck you!” someone else screamed.“

Tf kinda dialogue is that😭😭💀

„Because I do love you. You’re my best friend. And that’s just as valuable as a lover.“

Wild thing to say to someone you just friendzoned💀💀

„Kis her until she forgot the weight of the world pressing down on her“

When he gives you a kis😍😍🥰❤️‍🔥

„would she still idolize him if she knew what he really was?“

Wait why are we acting like the fathers actions weren’t pretty reasonable?💀 like what else was he supposed to do? sacrifice his 15 (FITFTEEN!) year old daughter??

„Wait. That daughter? That was the daughter Ragnall had come to rescue?“

??? Well, how many others of his daughters are missing?