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The kid isn't even 3 and talks in advanced sentences, using surnames, logic, reason and hypothesis? Nope.

Appalling number of bad contractions, some of the worst including "and's" and "passengers'd". Disjointed writing with rambling dialogue sentences that need a serious edit.

This seems to be self-published with no editor ever having touched it. It's crammed full of tense errors (pick a tense you want to write in, and stick to it), and if I start on about the issues with how the plot is worked, the patronizing tone, and the plot errors, I'd be here all day. The last 20% is better than the previous 80%, but just don't bother with this.

Chapter 13 REALLY got my goat. The story has been plodding along like a sleepy snail that keeps sneezing, and was finally put back on track in ch12, at long last giving us some actual plot rather than a serious of characters, but then had to go through a re-hash of stuff that had already been done and put to bed.

The concept of multiple writers is cute, but it's deviating and waffling too much.

Goes in the DNF folder. Racist and celebrating shooting animals. Not for me.