Bex’s Reviews > Death in the Sunshine > Status Update

This seems to be self-published with no editor ever having touched it. It's crammed full of tense errors (pick a tense you want to write in, and stick to it), and if I start on about the issues with how the plot is worked, the patronizing tone, and the plot errors, I'd be here all day. The last 20% is better than the previous 80%, but just don't bother with this.