This is great, save for two things. One. Everyone and I mean Every-Bloody-One, is giggling. Not smiling, not smirking, not laughing but giggling. From bad ass soldiers to a Gandalf look alike vampire, everybody is giggling ALL THE TIME. Two. I don't think that "glare" means what the author thinks it means. Glaring with affection, with respect, with admiration, it all just sounds wrong to me. Other than that, go Sam!
— Jul 25, 2017 03:42AM
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