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Luckily we read that our MC trains. A lot: before breakfast, runs after breakfast, trains with the rest and somehow still has the energy and time to read and hang out. I wish I had her stamina. The story sometimes feels a bit juvenile, like our MC. It’s better than I expected (so far), but still average/okay.

Love how she is constantly stating that she could kill them all in a flash, is that arrogance, overconfidence or skill? And of course she is familiar and very good with all weapons, even maces. Haven’t read that she is muscular or that she trains with weights.

Again we have an 18 year old who is a prodigy in what she does. Foundations of romance, or the obligatory 3 way, are set: beautiful eyes/lingering glances etc.

I am not sure what to think. I’m kinda getting bored

So Mathilda is young and that shows. Maybe it would have worked better if she was a bit older. Picked for a momentous task and every time something goes “wrong” it’s running and crying. Maybe the Institute could’ve trained her better (?)

I can’t seem to get invested in the story. Somehow Asha has managed to self learn programming, flying and lots of other skills she just happens to need while being an “indentured worker” who gets no education. We get told a lot of stuff, never really seeing it happen.

I still struggle with the flow of the sentences. Takes me out of the story.

I get distracted by the sentences. It feels like literally translated from another language (which it probably is). They feel quite bumpy. Some repetition: i.e. she looked with curiosity and disgust; and was disgusted by. Storywise is okay, not that invested yet.

I thought the heroine/protagonist would be older, but she is at most I think 18-20(?)

The language is very full and flowery; a thing new/recent authors do. Like they are more focused on convincing the reader that they have a large vocabulary instead of making sentences that flow/read easily.

Feel a bit iffy. Heroine is described as around 13. Her brother a few years older with a wife younger than the heroine. Heroine is betrothed to 15 year old. Author stated she wrote this when she was 13 herself, so maybe she didn’t truly understand the ramifications? Language is very formal, it doesn’t flow for me.

I do not like the main character. She is belligerent, stubborn, acts like a young kid even though she became an adult “decades ago”, disrespectful and has absolutely no qualms about lying to get what she wants. Curious to see if she betters herself in the rest of the book.