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This is drawn out like overpowered molasses.

rather OP, and yes, definitely different from the author’s other, later, works

What even is this?! Self-categorising as “USA wank”, and then:

Punctuation within quotes is meant to be lyrical rather than grammatical; e.g. a “,” is a pause that marks the end of a spoken phrase, a “–” is a longer pause in someone's thinking or an interruption of someone's phrase, and a “...” is the unintended, and usually confused, end of someone's sentence.

Lots of telling, no showing, atrocious spelling.

ugh, A/N says second of her trilogy will be romance… but third will be better, so I have to wade through that, in a not-easy-to-follow plot from an author taking a bite too large for her skills…

p457 of 854

of 854, at my terminal size, not 1091

Now the author has decided to fully leave the majority of the world behind:

She frowned again. "Does the term '[…]' mean anything to you?"

"That's American, right?"

"It was," Tonks confirmed. "Bloody nonsense, too. Why mess about with fractions?"

No explanation of the term used. In a fic playing in a british universe. Sod this.

This is… certainly different from canon.

(Also, if victorian flower language is even a thing, Parkinson or whoever sat in the same class and also knew it could have told. Okay, Parkinson probably didn’t deign to have lessons in V.f.l…)

lol @ “She gave a P.O. box that the lessons could be sent to, and their email address if that was better to be used for correspondences.”

eMail, in 1990, yeaaaaaaaah sure (in a residential home in Europe anyway)

oh ffs this is SO cringe

yikes is that cringe

Schon n bißchen cringe… aber auf jeden Fall ein Erlebnis. Und anders.

even less immediately applicable unless you want to follow his a bit convoluted/heavy example

That one story in my feed has funny reviews (one the longest I’ve seen), but MWPP era and romance genre are not for me :/

Incoherent trainwreck, by now derailed.

Got worse and worse over the last 100+ pages, but this now is… beyond rational explanation.

(And the author definitely has botched his timeline and forgot an entire year at Hogwarts.)

Behold, the feared “Veratiserum”[sic!]

Now the author expressed support for George Bush (the USA president), both of them. 🤯

Not entirely sure when this story switched from sixth to seventh year. I’m 95% certain the author just bollixed that up and forgot which year he was actually in.

Writing partly incoherent. Major lack of setting-appropriateness, the author has kids driving around and, by his own words, cannot even imagine cops *not* running around with guns. Plot… existent, but general direction vague, too much back and forth executed badly.