Also, this needed an editor.
“Are they…” Rita’s eyes were glued to the scene as she turned to Tom.
So, is she looking at the scene, where her eyes are glued to, or at her husband, who she turned to? If it's such an amazing sight, why would she turn away from it?
Maybe it would've been better to write it as: "Are they..." Rita's eyes were glued to the scene as she stood next to Tom.
— Sep 11, 2023 01:30PM
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