This author is trying way too hard to be descriptive, it's clunky and just too much.
"Fine eyes squinted in disbelief until a handsome grin transformed his steely features into amiability."
I feel like I'm reading a series of Mad Libs. Don't know if I'll be able to see this one through to the end. I'm going to try, but....
— Jun 16, 2021 03:51PM
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