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I think I'm done. The narrator constantly referring to people who she knows the names of as "the female" just sounds so objectifying and disrespectful.

"He's not a danger to me, he's my mate" sounds a lot like the fae equivalent of "my boyfriend won't actually hurt me, he loves me" after he abuses her

Saying you want something when magically forced to seems a bit wrong. Like "hey do you love me?" "Yes because I'm being forced to".
Also, if you're actually important to your people as a leader then to hell with your selfish fated mate. The needs of the many come before your need to have sex with one woman.

Sigh.....yet another incident of insta jealousy despite never actually touching his mate. Seriously, uncontrollable and violent levels of jealousy over a mate you haven't even kissed yet? Yeah major red flag. Also, getting angry because your partner feels attracted to another person? Also major red flag. It's natural dumbass. If you actually think her body will stop responding to other guys you're dumb AF.

Here's another problem I have with Fated Mates. When they're magically induced to find every thing about their mate as attractive it makes compliments pointless. Like "Oh wow they're so hot". Yeah well you're magically forced to feel that way aren't you? So like do you actually think they're attractive or do you have magical Stockholm syndrome? Remember in this world, fated mates cause unwanted, uncontrolled boners

Ah yes....thinking about your fated mate gives you an instant boner...that's definitely not stupid at all. Also hypothetical question. If you're straight male but your fated mate is male, do you still get instant boner when you think about him?

The characters are alright but the whole fated mates thing is annoying me. One because it objectifies the characters. Oh she's not a person with her own feelings she's my mate. Two because the jealousy trope....like if you're fated to be with her who cares if she talks, hugs or even has sex with other people? Lol also the jealousy only extends to other men, guess she can have sex with women without jealousy?

Ah yes the classic trope of "let's literally risk people's lives because we're too horny to control ourselves". Yes, the obvious response to hiding in a closet together while guards are outside is to combine sex with the quiet game. The chance of getting caught and people killed makes it so much hotter. *sarcasm followed by an annoyed sigh*

Raven may be dumb but I do really love her compassion and honor even towards her enemies. She really does care about people

MMC: hey, you can't help your bother if you get caught doing this thing and executed.

FMC: but I wasn't caught was I?

Me: wow I said that exact same thing many times....in highschool....before I learned that actions have consequences. Raven why are you so dumb?

MMC: explains something very clearly

FMC: "I know what you mean but I don't understand unless you explain better

Me: Raven why are you so dumb?!

FMC: how do I make this man do what I want? How do I use him?

Me: seduce him with your body/personality

FMC: but if i do that I'll develop feelings

Me: what?! To hell with your feelings! You're here to save your brother and other people. Stop chirping "little bird" and just do it even if you have to "wing it".

"Little Bird" is such a cringe pet name. It's not clever or cute. In fact it sounds kind of demeaning. Like the british slang "bird" which often sounds patronizing or sexist. He's basically calling her "little girl".

Also, every time the MMC does something nice, the FMC says "why are you being nice to me?"
Oh i dunno....maybe because he likes you dumbass?

Ahhhhh the classic stupid plot device of using emotion instead of logic and letting the dangerous murderer live which backfires of course. Seriously, why are we trying to make the person responsible for all the pain and problems "comfortable"? Why is that a priority over protecting the seeds and other people?

Seems to me that 90% of problems in this book could've been solved with condoms and communication

All the problems of this book could be solved by the characters taking 2 minutes to compare instant gratification to long term goals and consequences. Example: their job is to save the seeds to protect the future of multiple entire species. And yet they sacrifice this future to save 2 individuals of a species and Dom literally teaches his kids to give into emotions not logic when tragedy strikes

I can't help but feel there's another message here. Rowan says that she doesn't want kids and society says that she must be broken because she doesn't want kids and calls out society as stupid for expecting her to eventually want kids.....then Rowan essentially adopts a kid so it feels like the moral is society is right and Rowan is wrong and I hate it

Ah yes, only the 9 year old knows enough about the seeds to know which ones to save. I'm so glad the family in charge of this supposed super serious job has delegated appropriately (sarcasm)

Yet again, the judgemental MC talking like an idiot "all men are the same. All demons are the same but I'm a special snowflake". Just imagine if she replaced "men" or "demons" with "Black people" every time she insulted a whole group and she'd sound like a horrible person. Also: "we're in here studying because we're losers with no plans". Stfu you're a student! I didn't know students are losers for studying!

Just when I'm starting to be okay with the FMC, she says the classic 15 year old immature saying "No one tells me what I'm capable of. I know what I can and can't do" in response to a much older and more experienced warrior saying "hey, don't do this thing, you'll die". Because FMC is always right

Can't help but feel if the MC was a guy instead of a woman, she'd be called out as super sexist. "Slutty" is not a nice way to describe anyone especially women because it perpetuates thd male oriented idea that if a woman dresses in revealing clothes or likes sex that she is to be condemned. Also "I'm not wearing underwear, I'm girlfriend material, the slutty halloween gods have been appeased". What?!

MC: "we all know that words from boys under the age of 25 are worth about as much as an expired nail salon coupon, most likely useless"
I'm not sure if I'm more annoyed by the judgemental sexism or the stupidity. If I said that but replaced "boys" with "girls" I'd definitely be called sexist. Also by that statement any guy over the age of 25 doesn't have useless words. Why is the mc so judgemental?

The characters continue to be flat, defined by their stereotypical roles. The "boy crazy" girl has to dress in revealing clothes. The jock has to be a dumb jock and proud of it. The nerd has to be into comic books. I've realized that the characters are put into boxes just like the MC puts everyone into boxes and judges them before she actually knows them. Also, what are these metaphors? Why so many metaphors?

I'm still trying to determine if this is young adult high school or adult college fantasy. A lot of the dialogue is highschool as is the stereotypical highschool types (physically weak/smart nerd, pretty boy jock, "boy crazy" girl, and judgmental know it). But then the MC will just whip out a "I've been hunting werewolves for years I have so much more experience than y'all" and I go "ah right, they're in college".

"I can't believe i shared something personal with the closest thing to an enemy" thinks the demon hunter about her instructor despite literally having demon enemies that she's fought and killed. No the closest thing you have to an enemy are literal enemies you idiot. Also, you didn't seem to mind being close enough to admire his "cozy boy sweat" whatever that is.