“Dear diary, mood: apathetic. My life is spiralling downwards…”
Way too much telling and not enough showing in this so far. We get it, the protagonist thinks he’s the worst person to ever exist, but we have to get it because it’s stated every other paragraph.
The “ritual” is fascinating and has a lot of potential if it wasn’t bogged down by the 2 edgy 2 live vibe.
— Mar 05, 2026 07:59PM
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