Haley’s Reviews > A Whisper In The Wind > Status Update

Love..?! You were just in love with someone else like 20 pages ago and like a week has passed...and you two have barely interacted! This is a classic example of a lot of telling rather than showing happening.

Time traveling twice is odd-- plus, I just don't care about the loss of the first love which I assume is going to be important since they never really interacted. If you are going to actually show this as development I just think it needs to be better developed for it to be impactful later. It would've been better for it to happen in the past (just not this literally).