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The Ginny recovery and hermione’s naievty is contrived and annoying.
Also the mione nickname is terrible
Last, the flashbacks are the highlight of the book but there are still portions that could be drastically reduced to make it flow better and improve pacing
— Mar 13, 2025 08:51PM
Also the mione nickname is terrible
Last, the flashbacks are the highlight of the book but there are still portions that could be drastically reduced to make it flow better and improve pacing
Anne
is starting
So far, everything before the flashbacks could be 50% shorter and it would flow better. It kind of drags. Hermione cries all the time which is annoying. Writing needs work - lots of repetition within chapters
— Mar 12, 2025 07:50PM

