Anne’s Reviews > Secrets and Masks > Status Update

Theo is the highlight of the book. The battle scenes lack gravity. There’s too much over narration. Also losing plot lines again. So much focus on the premonitions earlier but there are parts still unfulfilled and it doesn’t feel like they’re going to get connected back to the story.

Loses its way from about60-80%of the book with unnecessary side plots. Character development needs work. Not as invested in the Draco hermione relationship as in manacled

The characters need work. They’re very wishy washy. Malloy is so protective and yet doesn’t put any wards or spells on the manor in case they need to flee? They don’t just have things packed? I thought the safe house was fully stocked and get the elves are shoving things into bags and Astoria thinks she needs to grab whiskey.

Forgets some of the key plot points, like Draco dying would cause hermiones death. Some of the plot feels a little lazy at times

Odd usages of the word bastard

So! Many! Exclamation! Points!

I’m not sold on this version of Draco having friends. It’s not in alignment with his core character. Also hate that his dragon is named narcisss

Are his eyes grey or blue? It seems to change all the time.

So far the pacing at the start is better but I’m not sure where it’s going. Also suspect Astoria is being dosed with something to keep her in good spirits and fawning over the death eaters