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This seems to read a bit like a poor translation so far-
‘Louis-Philippe des Cigales well you couldn’t say that he’s panting no you couldn’t really say that but he is afflicted at the moment, in this moment that follows the realization of his difficult breathing,’
It just feels a little odd since this isn’t dialogue, a characters interior thoughts or written in first person.
— Jun 07, 2025 12:05PM
‘Louis-Philippe des Cigales well you couldn’t say that he’s panting no you couldn’t really say that but he is afflicted at the moment, in this moment that follows the realization of his difficult breathing,’
It just feels a little odd since this isn’t dialogue, a characters interior thoughts or written in first person.
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I think maybe the disjointed writing is an intentional device to set up a portrayal of an overall ‘dreamlike’ state through the entire piece but I’m not sure if it’s very effective just yet
— Jun 07, 2025 12:11PM
