Lit Reader’s Reviews > The Governess of My Heart: A Pride and Prejudice Variation > Status Update

People keep “collapsing on the floor crying”, dialogue is over dramatic and fake sounding, use of modern phrases is consistently interspersed.

My final rating keeps dropping, which surprises me, since my initial expectation wasn’t very high in the first place…

NOTHING MAKES SENSE! The “big mystery” of Elizabeth’s parents relationship is a convoluted mess that no one with a brain could remotely believe for a second, let alone try to understand or empathize with.

The story contradicts itself all the time, details are messy and mistakes are made (a brother is also a cousin, and then a brother again; a room on the first floor becomes a second floor with a balcony)

But also emotional plot points are all over the place >> Elizabeth hates Darcy for no reason, but she admires & respects him, but also hates him, but maybe loves him, but insults him because she hates him…

After a series of paragraphs where Darcy thinks about his budding love for “Elizabeth” in italics, he SUDDENLY realizes he DOESN’T know her first name after all…!

The drama is off the charts. Mr & Mrs Bennet yell and scream all the time, they screech and Mr. Bennet physically hit Mr. Collins… the plot makes no sense, characters’ actions make no sense, logic is lacking in every paragraph…

This alternate Lizzy is rather subdued and gloomy, cery Cinderella/Jane Eyre type situation. We are told she loves her father because Mr. Bennet understands her, but all we read about are scenes where he acts dismissive or abusive towards Elizabeth.

Things don’t add up, not even as a set-up for “the secret” of her origin to be disclosed later on:

Also, Jane is a vain, selfish pest!