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I’m aghast that this “vagary” was “written” in the first place…

The execution of every scene and plot twist is lacking and illogical.

Darcy has just arrived at Pemberley one day ago, and suddenly with no warning at all, Bingley opens a door into Darcy’s study with no warning, no letter or message, no announcement, and his excuse? Bingley arrives with Mr Bennet’s permission to marry Elizabeth (totally out of the blue!) — beyond PARODY.

The lack of logic here is so astounding that there seem to be two (or more) parallel timelines here, where characters are & aren’t, know & don’t know stuff at the same time [that’s insane, I know!]

For ex. Darcy was the son of a 2nd born, the eldest grandchild, but still his Darcy grandparents ignored him for 8 yrs & decided to leave Pemberley to a baby girl from the eldest son, and more…

Since Elizabeth is already told of a BIG SECRET, and warned about a serious, credible life threat to her, OF COURSE her next step would be to confess this big secret to Wickham and jump on a hired coach on a 3-day journey, accompanied by one Mrs Young, with the nonsensical intent of asking protection from Wickham’s mother at Pemberley [applause! ]

The first framing of the story was interesting and somewhat intriguing — the execution started to come apart around 12-16% in…

The author is making increasingly convoluted assumptions that will force the plot to bend over backwards to solve later, and which will become more & more far-fetched and dettached from historical reality… Disheartening.

Silly, illogical, convoluted, a poorly written and badly edited attemp.

This story begins righ after the Netherfield ball, when Bibgley decides de remain in Hertfordshire. We know Lizzy danced with Darcy and we assume Wickham was already in the picture. As per Austen, Darcy first encountered Wickham after Jane’s sick stay at Netherfield.

Now suddenly, there is a repeat scene where Darcy sort of first(?) sees Wickham in Meryton, but in early-mid December! Is it a glitch??

The lack of historical social awareness is shocking and worrisome >> Georgiana is a teenaged maid for Lady Matlock, but she is also like a ward of sorts who sleeps in servant quarters and does maid chores. But she is also ward & adoptive daughter of the Matlock steward -Mr. Wickham-, which means that there is literally zero reason for her to be a maid for anyone (worse now since Mr Darcy is master of Longbourn) !!

Bingley was already renting Longbourn when Darcy arrived in Meryton as Netherfield’s new steward. About 2 months later (max) Bingley is being evicted and thinks to purchase a different properry nearby…

Why would Darcy offer to show him this random property, claiming he “knows it well”, and start explaining how well maintained the old owner kept it, as if he knew the man???

The basis of this scandal is skewed; the story supposes finding Wickham would absolve Elizabeth from scandal, but that’s not true, finding the culprit of an assault on a Lady would only further the lewd gossip and dishonour of the Lady.

A period-accurate plot would support an argument for hushing the episode down through strong denial. Any modern idea of “justice” is naive projection…

If Darcy is supposed to be the new steward, WHY is he directing footmen, coordinating with house staff, advising maids about comportment??

There was supposed to be a distinct boundary between household staff, indoor servants, and other managerial positions such as a Lord’s secretary, land stewards: tenant supervisors or groundskeepers.

Wickham is supposed to me a Rector, and yet he is bored with his position and claims to want to pursue the law (what????) or even join the militia — this makes absolute no sense, it’s inrealistic, illogical, financially impossible !

Editorial errors; a scene is labeled as set at Longbourn when it clearly happens at Netherfield. Some gramatical mistakes too, I ususally just skip over those, but they add up!

The author seems confused about the issue of titles, property and inheritance. If Mr. Bennet got an Earldom for war heroics, he CANNOT have a distant cousin as his heir, only direct descendants. Mr. Collins can’t be in line for a recently created title.

If Mr. Collins is still Longbourn’s heir, the property COULD NOT be sold to Bingley, it’s one or the other here !

The illogical nonsense started right away! >> Mrs. Bennet is supposed to dislike the Bingley tenant aiming too high for Lady Jane… but the same woman is keem to send Lady Elizabeth (unescorted and in a house dress) to deliver a basket on her own, on foot, to the new young steward: Mr. Darcy.

Darcy is a steward’s apprentice and teenage Georgiana is being trained as a ladies’ maid — problem is she is also supposed to have received education and plays the piano (!!!). Those two things are not compatible, she was either raised as a ward and maybe she could become a governess (like Jane Fairfax), or she is a literal servant and playing the piano would be off limits to her in that capacity.

Dragging through this nonsense is excrutiating >> “She’s coming!”, “He’s coming!”, “where is he?”, “sing the song!”, “don’t sing the song!” [ frustrated eye roll ]

This is a faithful summary of +10 chapters of raving mad Lizzy soaring through the skies back & forth over a barren, destroyed kingdom, while Mary and Georgiana puzzle over a mythical song.

The sadistic impulses by this author are very concerning. Everything ends up being crashed, destroyed and violated >> women, homes, towns, the precious draca mauled and killed, main characters violated too (just to add something more to this orgy of violence).

Horrifying !!!

More gore, more needless destruction. This author has a fetish about physical consequences of torture — concerning.

The sadistic perverseness of the story has reached new heights >> the evil gamea played by the author are akin to the Seven movie — who in their right lind would think torture, medical abuse, enslavement, and murder were a good idea for an Austen-inspired plot ???

I am skipping through graphic descriptions of gore >> bloody carnage, slavers’ torture, women drugged and tradficked, soiled dresses, soiled rooms… everything sordid, disgusting and incompatible with Austen, in my opinion!

Aaaaand, more carnage! [ eye roll ]

The writing of fight scenes and convoluted battles is full chaos and puzzling lapses of judgement — characters freeze, become distracted, call out for someone’s attention at the worst possible moment, again & again! [ eye roll ]

The author is more comfortable straight-out in the realm of Fantasy than with P&P adaptations. Basing the story on Emma gives him more room to explore and be creative. Sadly, he is cramming too much into one story >> Austenesque, Dragons, mental health and ailments, educational reform, The Abolitionist cause, Slavery, proto-Feminism, and animal rights !

It’s just too much to properly string together!

Ah! the carnage has started…

This is Game of Thrones level of gore; serious slaughter for the sake of a poorly contrived “war” happening at Pemberley woods…

The hype with which the blurb hard-sold this story was seriously misleading!

Angsty, gory, the author takes delight in cruelty towards the characters and the P&P universe.

Friendly characters are needlessly killed, sentient animals are tortured and killed too, Jane is inflicted with a wasting madness, and even Pemberly itself sufferes awful violations that are painful to read…

What for???

The path from A to B is quite clear… so OF COURSE this Lizzy will make a tour through X, Y. Z to force some angst on us…

Unnecessary gore!

Dragging, sloooow, unnecessarily angsty.

Days and days or dreary rain described in painful repetitive detail for +50% of the story. Scenes rehashed again & again, circular thoughts and deja-vu paragraphs.

When is this torture going to end ?!???