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Bella Darcy went from Stupid-cute to Epic-Stupid in no time !! This girl is a problem magnet and it shows that maybe Elizabeth & Darcy were not such good parents after all…

What type of forward, vulgar Mr. Bennet is this???

“I confess that I very much wish to tell the two of you that you are welcome to whichever of my daughters you prefer, but I suppose that is rather much for a first meeting.”

Lizzt met Darcy the night before at an inn; he hasn’t met her family yet. She hasn’t met Bingley at all!

Why did Elizabeth read P&P ahead of this story ??? How does she know the Bingleys + Darcy will want to flee Meryton? Why ??

“With Mama having decided that his friend was destined for Jane, would her insistence on the match cause them all to pack up and leave Hertfordshire abruptly?”

Lizzy just met Mr. Darcy TWO MINUTES AGO in a random roadside inn — ridiculous oversharing!

“My mother decries me as entirely too wilful, too intelligent, too much of a bluestocking, and not nearly as pretty as Jane…”

There are some weird glitches here too = Charlotte is in mourning for about one month, she is back home, and Sir William is somehow hosting friendly neighborhood dinners?

The Bingleys visit newlyweds D&E in their honeymoon bolthole (why??), next thing at Longbourn Bingley acts as if he had not seen Lizzy since her wedding.

D&E were supposed to be already in London, E mentions “when we get to London” (what?)

I was looking very much forward to this release!

The previous part was very dark, but smartly framed and well narrated. This one is even more gloomy, but somehow the constant hammering on Elizabeth & Charlotte’s victimhood doesn’t quite congeal…

We already know from Part 1 what Charlotte & Elizabeth did, & what Darcy & Cnel did to help them; so WHY are E&Ch acting as the VICTIM/CAPTIVES now??? Makes no sense

“Julia broke the seal and unfolded the first letter”

THE WHOLE POINT OF THE PLOT IS THAT DARCY ALREADY OPENED AND READ THESE LETTERS !!!!!

Darcy has no moral justification foe deceiving Elizabeth for so long, abusing her trust and manipulating her feelings. That Caroline Bingley decides to disclose Darcy’s deceit comes across not so much as villainous, but actually as some much needed Tough Love !

The mystery is solved, Julia Harding had amnesia! But of course Darcy’s duplicity and lying hypocrisy are coming back to haunt him (and hirt him badly).

Does Lizzy deserve a self-serving, schemingc manipulative beau on a power trip??

Misleading premise = this is Elizabeth’s story of heartache after her soulmate disappears in mysterious circumstances.

The tone is quite bitter and angsty, and Elizabeth’s hopeless romantic friendship with Miss Julia has a weird creepy angle since they are described as physically looking like sisters or twins.

Why is the setup so bizarre???

So many glitches!

From Mrs. Nicholls attending Elizabeth at Longbourn, to descriptions of a small parish church in Hertfordshire having organ music to accompany the ceremony (!!!).

Organ music was reserved to large churches of importance, or specific very wealthy venues until after the Regency. The popularization of organs for church music happened much later in the 19th Century.

Elizabeth says her first two dances are promised to Mr. Collins. Then says there’s no Mr. Collins at Longbourn, he has not arrived yet.

Is this a cheeky joke, or has Elizabeth read P&P ahead of the ball? Is this an AI glitch ???

Darcy is walking with Elizabeth when they first meets Wickham; Darcy withstands intruductions made by Denny. Elizabeth says “you staid”, because OF COURSE she would have read P&P beforehand and knew Darcy really wanted to leave, ride away with his horse, in some (canon) alternate universe !

[ eye roll ]

Eye-roll; this was written by someone(?) who didn’t pay much attention to P&P at all! The whole point of white soup is that it takes a long time to make, that it’s a festive (elegant) dish; the process serves as a measure of time to set a date for the Netherfield ball.

It’s not a daily dish to request in the same day!

“Mrs. Nicholls wished to know whether Jane preferred broth or white soup at dinner.”

Same three-sentence structure >> formulaic and fake sounding, it doesn’t even make sense half the time.

Strange glitches or small timeloops >> Darcy gets dressed, his valet offers 2 cravats choices, he picks one. Darcy goes down and has social interactions with Bingley, Elizabeth, and Caroline. Then he goes upstairs to his room, both cravats are still there waiting for him.

Serious timeline problem !!

Elizabeth leaves Pemberley in a hurry, she is going south by carriage with the Gardiners. Darcy leaves Pemberley hours after them by horse, and yet instead of easily catching with with them on the road, it’s three days AFTER Elizabeth has already arrived to Longbourn (explicitly, Lizzy says it’s been a week since Pemberley!) and he is not arrived yet — bonkers!

This “story” is one never-ending timeloop on which Miss Bingley tries to manage Georgiana, Georgiana is pained by it, Darcy notices, there is some subtle rebellion, Miss Bingley is too-subtly put in her place, Darcy ponders about how he should have noticed this and prevented it… and then the exact same thing happens all over again without any plot advancement !!

Too forward by far !!

“I believe,” she said while scanning titles, “that this room alone might persuade many women to marry.”

Watching Lydia at Pemberley interacting with Georgiana is entertaining, even endearing. But the clever repartee, besides being formulaic, hides a parade of puzzling open-ended subplots…

What was Bingley’s reaction meetinf the Bennet sisters at Pemberly? Did Miss Bingley acknowledge in any way visiting the Gardiners’ home in London? Why Bingley only laughs at Lydia but doesn’t ask about the Bennets back home?

Bad omen here… this particular sentence structure raises some red flags, doesn’t it ??

“Miss Bingley was praising Derbyshire with all the enthusiasm of a person who had never voluntarily admired anything outside London unless it belonged to him.”

Nearly every dialogue consists of a three piece structure >>

1) a simple statement
2) an answering denial or negative formula
3) an ammended reply incorporating the denial, now in positive form, often metaphoric or abstract

It’s formumaic and tiresome. This is why readers suspect so many authora use AI — more so when used for filler scenes !

Really?? [ eye roll ], the story was already ridiculous & contrived before this episode >>

‘ “Compromise!” a triumphant woman screeched, shocking Lingley out of his stupor. ‘

This story tries very hard to match P&P’s universe with some vintage sitcom episode about a character named Mahana(?), hence renaming Mary “Mary-Hanna” and aggressively abusing her in what’s supposed to be hilarious comedy ; it’s not.

In which Darcy casually discusses attending brothels with Elizabeth…

Darcy’s explanation of WHY he went to the brothel where he found Lydia :

“I went willingly. I had indulged in such amusements before.” — BARF.

Why is Mrs. Reynolds working in Darcy’s London home too ??

The timeline is fuzzy; the time lapae between travels, letters, waiting time, and more letters being sent doesn’t quite add up or correlate with the rest of the action…

In which Mr. Darcy comes across Lydia Bennet IN A BROTHEL !!

This story makes me feel sick…

I LOVE stories about courtship, about building an understanding. This one was quite promising, but the self-examination and repetitive time-loops because of double points od view are getting tiresome.

Now the story will switch focus and deal with one of Fake Darcy’s London friends (obviously Bingley) going to court youg ward Kitty in the country, under guise of a false name [ eye roll ].

What works well in a Comedy of Errors won’t necessarily work well in JAFF !!