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The whole timeline is wrong = Elizabeth’s father is Cnel Fitzwilliam’s uncle; the Cnel is said to be 29 years old, and to have been “secretly” named for his uncle, but under pretense of being called after another relation because of the “scandal”.
But the scandal only happened when E’s father eloped with E’s mom 1.5 years before Elizabeth was born.
Elizabeth is only 20 years old at this point.
— Jul 15, 2026 07:00PM
But the scandal only happened when E’s father eloped with E’s mom 1.5 years before Elizabeth was born.
Elizabeth is only 20 years old at this point.
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Lit Reader
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The story emphasizes Christmas every other paragraph = Christmas time dictating characters’ presence and movements, Elizabeth being a Christmas present to the family, an upcoming Twelftht Night ball being particularly significant.
It makes me think the story was planned as a seasonal release and somehow the actual launch was pushed forward for some reason…
— Jul 17, 2026 02:00PM
It makes me think the story was planned as a seasonal release and somehow the actual launch was pushed forward for some reason…
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Mr. Bennet says >> “You are an heiress, Lizzy.” He chuckled. “How could I have forgot that?
INDEED ! HOW IN THE WORLD did he manage to “forget” that pesky detail of inherited wealth ?? [ eye roll ]
— Jul 15, 2026 02:43PM
INDEED ! HOW IN THE WORLD did he manage to “forget” that pesky detail of inherited wealth ?? [ eye roll ]
Lit Reader
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Are we supposed to believe that Mr. Bennet conveniently “forgot” the name of his only sister’s husband, and little Elizabeth’s father, even after receiving a letter from his sister’s hand, and documents of his brother-in-law’s will ??? Because he was distracted, there was family turmoil, and then Old Mr. Gardiner’s office (conveniently) burned down ????? [ eye roll ]
— Jul 15, 2026 01:27PM
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Jul 15, 2026 07:20PM
Oh, no. I was looking forward to this. I'll still probably read it, but timeline issues bother me more than grammar issues.
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I am just starting, and all that comes across to me here is how childish the writing it ! Simplistic narration, too much telling & no showing, and now very bad timeline mistakes mean there was no serious editing involved.I was looking forward to it too — hahahah.