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SO MUCH EXPLAIJNING ABOUT WHAT HELEN THINKS

There are very detailed scenes and then endless mind ramblings from a miserable looser. I'm really not enjoying this.

Helen is one dimensional. She wants to be a writer.
Cherry is one dimensional. She is quirky.

Their friendship is one dimensional. We hear again and again that Cherry is Helens best friend, but Helen thinks she's better than everyone so...

Helen is (allegedly) so socially awkward that she needs a diagnoses. This is quite a drag.

This is very two dimensional. There is a great deal of detail about specific things - like the 6 people who attend one workshop - while everything else is very vague. There are hundreds of other people.
Some details just read wrong. They are at a crowded party, with a patio and a hot tub, and only the two main characters are outside

If I'm going to spend this much time in the main characters head, this could be better in first person.

This book does a lot of showing, directly followed by explaining that to the listener. At one point our omniscient narrator states that Helen's decisions are reactive, and spends a paragraph explaining how that works in literary theory.
At 20 % I'm in the middle of a writing workshop. This is not a book in a rush. I'm unclear whether it's meant to be satire.