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“Instead of standing around, staring, can you go up and get me my briefcase? My car keys and ID are in there”

? 💀💀 ok

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“Thanks a lot, then.” The woman pointed at her forehead, still glowering.”

she’s not… amusing or funny at all? just sounds like a fucking asshole? literally she caused the accident and now she’s being annoying abt it?

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“Austen would have remembered a colleague with such a sexy ass”

💀

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“If she’s that good, why didn’t we hire her as my new secretary?”

they all sound so bitchy and entitled and fucking unpleasant god… it’s truly a beyond difficult task to write a nice sassy cocky character. cuz there’s a risk of THIS

SHOULDNT* 😭😭😭😭

“She’s an intelligent, young woman”

should have a comma here

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i just want a well written book 😞😞 why is this too much to ask for for fucks sake guys

“Anyway, poor Wendy. I had no idea her depression had gotten so bad.”

?

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“The man and the elevator’s other occupant, a woman in business attire”

like i wish i could explain why this is bad but i can’t and it’s making me frustrated

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“When her feet hit the two concrete steps leading out to the yard, she realized that she wasn’t wearing shoes”

i can’t say what’s wrong w this, but i know something is… such an unnecessary “showing”… could have focused on word economy and said “it took me a second to realize…” LIKE. come on!