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Marie is 22% done

Though there are some jarring editing issues, like sudden POV changes between characters and a jump from third person to first person, the story is interesting.

— Dec 20, 2016 11:38AM

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Marie is 60% done

Argh, I just can't like these characters. And rehashing every event after it happens with everyone around Cassie is having me skip whole paragraphs to get back to the story.

— Dec 22, 2016 09:37AM

Marie is 55% done

Kind of annoying that every time Logan kisses Cassie she "feels it down to her toes." Every. Time.

— Dec 21, 2016 05:57PM

Marie is 50% done

Dialogue and repetition carry so many of these chapters. I need facial expressions, emotions, body language. I need to like these characters.

— Dec 20, 2016 10:47PM

Marie is 36% done

Lots of telling, little showing. I want to really feel the characters!

— Dec 20, 2016 12:25PM