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"My gaze darts poignantly to the key ring hanging on his bloodstained belt."
Say what?
It's "My gaze darts pointedly to the key ring hanging on his bloodstained belt." Jeez. O.o
I want to be annoyed with the editors, but come on. The author studied English literature, but even if she hadn't, I assume she, ya know, reads.
— Dec 02, 2025 11:12AM
Say what?
It's "My gaze darts pointedly to the key ring hanging on his bloodstained belt." Jeez. O.o
I want to be annoyed with the editors, but come on. The author studied English literature, but even if she hadn't, I assume she, ya know, reads.
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Dec 03, 2025 10:22AM
I'd cut the adverb altogether.
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Mr. James wrote: "I'd cut the adverb altogether."Yeah, within the paragraph's context it's unnecessary. :|
