lils wills’s Reviews > Diary of an Oxygen Thief > Status Update

so i finally made it to chapter 3.

1. i don’t like how the timeline is switched, its so hard to keep track of what’s happening…i have to stay and stop in the middle of paragraphs because there are no natural stopping points either.
2. the blonde chick warning the narrator about ainsling is actually cheese. cornball.
3. i like the concept but fuck i wish it was better organized.

i like the voice used here…it’s personal, introspective, and raw. however, the past and present gets really jumbled together. i like to jump timelines via flashbacks in my pieces, but this is a whole other level of timeline jumping. it’s hard to even know where the current scene is taking place someonetimes…

there’s some really great paragraphs in here.

hate him actually.