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is 40% done
I am enjoying the plot but the writing keeps tossing me out of the story with tonal whiplash. Author is trying desperately for pseudo-midieval fairy tale but keeps leaking modern colloquialisms. Also, yes, Ravyn is the Captain of the Destriers and he has gray eyes. Yes, I get it! Stop telling me. Also this, "my smile did not touch my eyes." Ick. That's just lazy writing. Do better, Rachel.
— Dec 30, 2025 04:40PM

