Marina’s Reviews > Two Twisted Crowns > Status Update

Sooooooo much stage direction!!! The jaws clench, tense, tick. The fingers curl, flex, graze. She picked up the goblet, drank, lowered it, put it down on the table. Fantastic. Like we can't figure that out from, "she drank the wine." Every tiny movement, emotion and breath is cataloged like archeology notes. It's tedious. We need a different editor. Still... On the plus side, the story is good.