C E’s Reviews > Golden Legacy: Part Two > Status Update

Im guessing the soul on page 268 meant something to zyla but im unsure what. I find myself skimming parts of the battle even unintentionally but at certain places i dont find myself missing much. Phoenix is back and Aladora are both back which is kind of cool. Still feels like you could have vivalda’s, silva’s and maybe zyla’s pov and not much would change and no context would be missing

Silvas new form is cool, seems like aerowen doesnt have a distict character trait. In both books she is just kind of their and blends into the background. Kind of feels like the “weak one” in both books and kind of feels like a worf character. She seems to be used in the first book to show how powerful vivalda is and in this book to show how powerful melantha is. Not much else to say so far

Kind of feels like its a character 1 have your coold moment, character 2 have your cool moment and i feel like the other povs dont add much of anything and this entire part could have been one characters pov. Still have issues where Aerowen doesnt have anything personality wise distinct about her. Very long battle scene so far that drags at times. Feels like it was written for a movie more then for a book

Issues with pacing and characterization. Some scenes drag and it feels like i could skip 2-3 pages im some sections without losing much or any contest. There is definitely improvements with descriptive words though. Why doesnt the father know about his oldest daughter? Why didnt melantha infect any pf the citizens or even attempt to go after riverlynn? Vivalda is a self insert of the author potentially.