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Yes we know she's female, you could just say the warrior stepped forward, why does it have to be the female warrior stepped forward.

You've never felt the need to control a lover? Then why did you consider a love potion like your father? Kingfisher you clearly did once so that's a lie

Kingfishers father went for a love potion that said 'the object of your hearts desire will be powerless against your advances' and went yeah I want that. Thats disgusting behaviour, yeah he didn't get it but he wanted to. That is so problematic, the fact Kingfishers mom still got with the man who was willing to assault her and Kingfisher sees that as romantic? Its not dude!

'The female didn't come' just say the vampire didn't come. I thought female was a term for fae, why they using it on vampires? We know she's female, we don't need to hear it every time.
Fisher knew it was his friend on the roof, so why did he say male. Its so overused I'm getting freaking annoyed with it.

'I'm a male of my word' Did the author even read that out loud? It doesn't even sound right. You cant replace man with male for everything.

What do you mean Lorreth is with Carrion in the training hall? Carrion is with Kingfisher in another place! What a stupid editing mistake to make