Amy P’s Reviews > Moonshine: A Post-Apocalyptic Romance > Status Update
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is 2% done
• voice-first writing vs showing
• FMC narrating like she’s performing personality
• banter + self-commentary that undercuts danger
• “look how quirky/clever I am” tone in a world that should be terrifying
Full of tonal dissonance that I can’t even finish the 1st chapter. I can tell I am not going to like the author’s tone. This should be darker.
— Feb 02, 2026 07:04PM
• FMC narrating like she’s performing personality
• banter + self-commentary that undercuts danger
• “look how quirky/clever I am” tone in a world that should be terrifying
Full of tonal dissonance that I can’t even finish the 1st chapter. I can tell I am not going to like the author’s tone. This should be darker.
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