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An ideal beginning that gripped me from the first pages.
Minor drawback: syntactic errors
Location errors: people dinning at the dinning room, then removing to the drawing room in pomp, suddenly appearing in the dinning room (when, why?), proposal and fake kissing in the library, suddenly appearing in the drawing room (when, why?).
— Feb 07, 2026 10:01PM
Minor drawback: syntactic errors
Location errors: people dinning at the dinning room, then removing to the drawing room in pomp, suddenly appearing in the dinning room (when, why?), proposal and fake kissing in the library, suddenly appearing in the drawing room (when, why?).
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More syntactic errors
Age error: hero 14 yo when first met with heroine 17 yo
hero 23 yo when marries heroine 25 yo
Heroine feels aged/ old!!! being 25 yo!
— Feb 09, 2026 10:14AM
Age error: hero 14 yo when first met with heroine 17 yo
hero 23 yo when marries heroine 25 yo
Heroine feels aged/ old!!! being 25 yo!
