Matthew’s Reviews > Super Sales on Super Heroes > Status Update

It’s minor things with the writing, the dialogue is split into paragraphs with end quotes even though the speaker remains the same. There is no visual distinction to show a time skip occurs, at most a single space between a paragraph and another paragraph. Lack of detail on environment which creates disconnects when detail suddenly becomes important ‘the wood cracked’ without ever mentioning wood.

Prety good so far honestly, I'm intrigued and invested in this business development journey, honestly, it's a page turner. I have a few gripes with how the story seems to really rush through things, like it's desperate to get to the next plot element instead of spending some time to describe the environment, describe the characters / characterize, update old plot threads and just time skips forward.