Seon Ji (Dawn)’s Reviews > Prototype Exodus > Status Update
Seon Ji (Dawn)
is 20% done
I see issues already with logic and story crafting.
1) Des is so angry his friends died.. yet we are never shown his relationship with them in order to sympathize with Des.
2) I'm still pissed Des left for 5 yrs & didn't once think about Hazel. He's supposed to have human emotions..he loves her.. wtf?
3) What has Hazel been doing for 5 years?
I hope these matters will get explained or I this may end up a dnf
— Mar 09, 2017 10:58AM
1) Des is so angry his friends died.. yet we are never shown his relationship with them in order to sympathize with Des.
2) I'm still pissed Des left for 5 yrs & didn't once think about Hazel. He's supposed to have human emotions..he loves her.. wtf?
3) What has Hazel been doing for 5 years?
I hope these matters will get explained or I this may end up a dnf
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Seon Ji (Dawn)’s Previous Updates
Seon Ji (Dawn)
is 75% done
almost done, and not looking forward to having to wait for the next book.
it seems this one may be a bit more of a cliffhanger..
— Mar 10, 2017 12:00PM
it seems this one may be a bit more of a cliffhanger..
Seon Ji (Dawn)
is 60% done
Still good.. but I now see what reviewers were saying about repettitiveness. It also seems to have too much stream of consciousness going on and not enough action or dialogue.
— Mar 10, 2017 06:47AM
