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is 64% done
Obviously meant to be uncomfortable given the subject matter but the writing style is so jarring and snappy in a way that doesn't lend itself to the story it's trying to tell at all. Very unrefined and heavy handed & def could have used a dose of "show don't tell" lol
— May 13, 2026 09:12AM

