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joan
is 22% done
I like the style of writing and the storyline. However the inconsistencies have been very distracting. In the first few pages Margo went from wearing a yellow sweater and leggings tucked inside motorcycle boots to a dress exposing her legs as he dumps her on the bed after she gets drunk at work. There has been other smaller ones too. Poor writing, really, really bad editing.
— Apr 07, 2017 10:19AM
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