Nerine Dorman’s Reviews > The Cathedral of Cliffdale > Status Update
Nerine Dorman
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Itching to jump in with my red pen on the dialogue...
— Apr 16, 2017 04:53AM
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Nerine Dorman
is 30% done
Exposition interrupts flow... Steps outside deep point of view to keep reminding readers of eye colour. "As you know, Bob" dialogue.
— May 27, 2017 09:30AM
Nerine Dorman
is 19% done
So Quinn doesn't seem awfully bothered by the vampire...
— Apr 24, 2017 01:49PM
Nerine Dorman
is 5% done
Opening is a bit heavy on exposition. Some wonky dialogue tags but this looks like a fun, light fantasy read.
— Apr 09, 2017 01:24PM
