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Ally
is 26% done
"Mothers" - the premise here (pretend child of a couple takes on a greater reality to the abused partner after the breakup) has potential, but we learn all of it in the first page or so and there's no real development.
— Aug 10, 2026 05:31PM
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Ally
is 17% done
"Inventory" - Liked the trick on this one, a list of encounters is a nice spin on the diary short story. I love the diary form for the degree of elision it allows, which here emphasizes the loneliness and scale of the story by leaving most of it out. A nice rhyme with the experience of a ONS / brief love as in most of these snippets, that can carry a lot of meaning while you only know a tiny part of the other.
— Aug 05, 2026 02:14AM
Ally
is 13% done
"The Husband Stitch" - lots of lovely sentences, could probably have been a quarter the length with the same impact. The "if you are reading this aloud" interludes were a nice trick repeated too often; the other-horror-stories were almost all unnecessary and many were dull, we needed maybe one or two in the beginning. The central conceit is both obvious and makes no sense, which maybe just makes it horror?
— Aug 04, 2026 03:13PM