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Leilin
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Really cool ideas (I ended up reading about potential direct brain-to-brain communications, here on Earth - the whole thing is a very cool rabbit hole to fall in)... that it belabors a bit: we got it the 1st time + exposing everything under every possible angle, including alien POVs, makes it feel a bit less alien. That being said, I do love how the alien chapters portrays the fluid continuum of its individuality.
— Oct 18, 2026 08:46PM
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Leilin
is on page 160 of 436
The man has good ideas. Not groundbreaking, but examined under angles I appreciate and peppered with smart little insights... but really I'm not that impressed with the writing itself. We could use some polishing here + wondering if a bit less exposition/explanation of the concepts wouldn't be better (I mean, between the natural history chapters and the alien POV chapters... we get it I think ^^). Still enjoying it!
— Oct 13, 2026 03:03PM
Leilin
is on page 63 of 436
Ok, getting the hang of the writing, which really could use an editor: there are word repetitions, unclear pronoun reference and at times questionable use of conjunctions... and just general lack of smoothness, with things being moved from then referenced again within a few sentences, breaking the expected flow of ideas. It's not terrible writing, it's just unpolished and needing an editor.
— Aug 11, 2026 09:27AM