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Elysian Fields
is 62% done
A few editing issues, some word choice issues, repetative thoughts/lines, and too formal/sophisticated dialogue for a 1% MC.
Really like Rayna/Daisy and Fury. Cute slighly dark/heavy story. Enjoying it.
— Dec 31, 2017 01:47PM
Really like Rayna/Daisy and Fury. Cute slighly dark/heavy story. Enjoying it.
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Elysian Fields
is 85% done
One more thing... when two characters are speaking there is no separation between their dialogue within the same paragraph. In order to follow who is speaking you gave to pay attention to the quotation marks. It is annoying and distracting.
— Dec 31, 2017 03:16PM
Elysian Fields
is 70% done
two characters with the same name.
Ryder Dixon, AKA Fury
Rider, a club brother. Confusing...
— Dec 31, 2017 02:27PM
Ryder Dixon, AKA Fury
Rider, a club brother. Confusing...
Elysian Fields
is 63% done
Another thing tgat bugs me is tgat the narration changes between characters randomly in the same chapter. Each paragraph or so and there is no warning or labeling. I have has to double check how is actually speaking a few times. Its frustrating and slowing my enjoyment a bit.
— Dec 31, 2017 02:04PM
