Petal’s Reviews > Phoenix Fire > Status Update

So the story is improving and making it interesting enough for me to keep reading, even if the grammar is driving me a little bonkers.

"This girl had the innocent yet wary thing down in a way I had never seen before. Intriguing."

Those kind of one word sentences are pretty common place in her writing.

Answers a couple of chapters later! She did drop the phone.

There's some weird jumping around all over the place with the conversations and what's going on, it's hard to follow.

One minute she's talking to Wyatt on the phone, and with no indication that the call had ended, she's suddenly chasing after a dog outside. Did she hang up? Did she forget Wyatt was on the other end?

Her foster parents seem nice and understanding, though Ava is not willing to give them a shot