Jen_C’s Reviews > In a Heartbeat > Status Update

“Ev, I love you so much. You came into my darkness and in a heartbeat you brought light into my life. You have shown me what love is and what it feels like to be truly loved. I can’t wait to spend forever with you in my arms...”

I have to find her. This is my girl. The girl I love with everything I have. She has quickly become my world and I can’t imagine living without her. She has to live through this. I have to find her. “EAVEN! CAN YOU HEAR ME? PLEASE YELL IF YOU HEAR ME!”

I'm leaning deep into the truck when I hear gravel crunching behind me. I don’t know why, but I have a bad feeling, so I dial Talon’s number and tuck my phone into my bra. I rise up and turn to see Nicole aiming a gun at me. Shit. I try to pretend I don’t see the gun and slam the door closed.

“I am alive because you breathe life back into me every day. Before I met you, I just existed. I have felt more alive with you than I ever have before. You make me want to become someone worthy of you.” “You do the same for me. You make me soooo happy.” She says, smiling, and kisses my chest.

He collapses his weight and falls on top of me. We wrap our arms and legs around each other and lie there as one. I can’t tell where he begins and I end. I am wrapped up in this man literally and emotionally. I know at this moment that I am for sure falling in love with him. I hope he doesn’t break my heart as I am giving it to him with every moment that passes.

If we are so miserable apart, maybe we should make it official and be together.” “Are you asking me to be your gf?” “Does gf stand for good f***?” “Um…no.” I say, and pinch his chest twisting to cause pain. “Ouch! Sh**. I am kidding. Eaven would you like to be my girlfriend?” “Yes. I would love to be your girlfriend.

Eaven, I need to tell you some things about me. I am not this happy, carefree person that you seem to bring out in me. I have dark secrets and disappointments that haunt me. You make me forget the old me. I have felt more alive in the past few hours than I have in years, and for that I want to thank you.

Dialogue is SO robotic cause they don't use contractions. I will, you are, you will etc.

So far it is all TELL not show and major info dumps.