Wilmar Luna’s Reviews > Sleepy Time For Captain Eris > Status Update

This dialogue is so effing, childish. W-T-F.

Now it's gone into torture porn territory. I've tried to be patient with this book but this is just gross. A bad guy is peeing in our "heroines" mouth? No. I'm taking off stars.

So did this chick just sleep with a robot? Where the hell is this story going?

The prose is simple . . . too simple. Really lacking in world building details, can't visualize scenes easily. Feels like I'm reading a highly edited first draft.

The interactions and the dialogue are interesting, but where's the plot? Still haven't encountered any conflict worth mentioning.

Lot's of typos in this .mobi file I received. I really hope this isn't the final, for sale version.

The formatting is completely out of whack on this mobi version. There seems to be a return included in the middle of most sentences. Very hard to tell who is speaking.

The lack of dialogue tags might make for a great audio book. But damn is it confusing to know who is talking, especially with multiple characters in the scene.