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Shari
is 25% done
Way to much dialog. Need some action where the sounds come from nature not mouth of these characters. And they need to grow up some. They come across as teenagers bragging about their hardons.
— May 14, 2019 03:21AM
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Suffers from telling vs. showing. If it showed him rubbing one out in the morning shower then I would be up for that. Just telling me: boring.
— May 13, 2019 08:45AM
