Loren Szendre’s Reviews > The Broken Eye > Status Update

I feel like this book is getting away from the author a little bit. There are new elements coming into play all the time. And I just read that the noble families "vying... to see who could ride better". But he just said that those children live on Big Jasper full time. It's one big city. Where would they learn to ride? The book is still fantastically interesting, so I'm still on track for 5 stars.

The author used the Hebrew alphabet directly as Old Parian, but he tried to do Ancient Hebrew
As such the letter Vav should have been Waw. But Yod was good :) The inclusion of phonetic symbols for Arabic don't work very well - recommend not using them in the future. One out of ten thousand people will understand them. Just use the base letters. Your editor will appreciate it too. The book is great!