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Frank Van Meer
is 19% done
Seriously, if I read one more time Joslyn kills someone by means of spinning crane followed by leaping frog, I'm gonna scream in seven different languages. She did none of this in the previous book.
— Apr 24, 2020 01:36PM
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Frank Van Meer
is 45% done
Great. Now Tashia is starting to bust out all these special moves as well. More "spring on water's".
— Apr 30, 2020 09:48AM
Frank Van Meer
is 25% done
I know it looks like all I do is complain, but I honestly love the story. It's just the choices the author made I have issues with.
— Apr 27, 2020 06:26AM
Frank Van Meer
is 24% done
People are always going on about "show, don't tell" when it comes to writing, and this book is a good example of telling me things, instead of showing. If you insist on Joslyn preparing for panther to spring before she uses Heron's Wings, SHOW me what that looks like, Don't TELL me. It's annoying.
Also, Joslyn seems to have acquired magical abilities or enhanced senses. Where was all this in the previous book ?
— Apr 25, 2020 10:22AM
Also, Joslyn seems to have acquired magical abilities or enhanced senses. Where was all this in the previous book ?
