Ciara1973’s Reviews > Scarlett Phoenix > Status Update

I'm gonna put this on hold for now. I have a buddy read and a few other books to read for my July challenge. The dialog is pretty weird in this book, I'm sure teenagers don't talk like this. Boring. Even the action scenes (when the MC is in great danger) it still seems boring. I don't know how this can happen, it remains a mystery to me. Anyway, I'm going to focus on more fun and interesting books, I hope. ;-)

"Ryan pinning her to the floor, trying to rip her clothes off. Touching her body. Forcing himself on her. His vile alcohol breath on her skin. 'He was going to rape me'
No shit, Sherlock. Stupid bitch, this book is pissing me off.

Can someone say "Mary Sue"?

God this bitch is stupid...
Wears a tight, red catsuit and walks off into a dark seluded area and then surprise: almost gets raped.

Hell no, she didn't just write: "Alex was next, her normally untameable Afro hair had been smoothed to perfection, and as she stepped carefully from the limo with the help of the driver the crowd gasped."
First of all, no I didn't forget any commas. Second, untameable Afro hair??
What do you know about "curly"or "kinky" hair???