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Clunky, clunky start. Huge paragraphs of 'dialogue' exposition. Let us be past this soon.
— Jul 23, 2013 01:09AM
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About halfway, in no danger of stopping but definitely struggling. So much dialogue that is not dialogue. It's stuff that people would never, ever, never say out loud. It breaks down all propriety to ask those questions out loud and no-one in their right mind would give an honest answer to a complete goddamn stranger. Lazy writing. Also people do not talk in paragraphs.
— Jul 23, 2013 04:17PM

