Alfaniel Aldavan’s Reviews > My Name Is Michael Bishop > Status Update
Alfaniel Aldavan
is 15% done
Quick start, well written and convincing. A world of holy, technology, and magic.
A few repetitions, a phrase repeating the previous idea, as if to be sure we got it. Not too much, though.
— Sep 19, 2013 06:27AM
A few repetitions, a phrase repeating the previous idea, as if to be sure we got it. Not too much, though.
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Alfaniel Aldavan
is 70% done
This world would make a very enjoyable universe of a RPG. Healing side, with its natural remedies, temples, plants. Magical side, with its unpredictability and wearing effects on sages, starwood spell platforms, and bottled or boxed ingredients. Apothecaries serving both.
Humans. Golems, steampunk machinery. Souls.
— Sep 29, 2013 05:12PM
Humans. Golems, steampunk machinery. Souls.
Alfaniel Aldavan
is 60% done
Interesting secondary character. At this point, the author still creates a shade of mystery around it, very sketchy, non-obvious. Slightly repetitive.
— Sep 27, 2013 01:22PM
Alfaniel Aldavan
is 55% done
And it starts... "My name is Michael Bishop".
The "aah" that follows the scene when we're witness to his memory loss. MC starts telling stories, to remind himself who he is, reason for the title.
— Sep 22, 2013 05:10PM
The "aah" that follows the scene when we're witness to his memory loss. MC starts telling stories, to remind himself who he is, reason for the title.
Alfaniel Aldavan
is 48% done
Beautiful writing. It flows just right. Sometimes almost musical in its round up.
Only now we find out - actually we probably will soon - the reason for the title. I fear that the blurb is actually a bigger spoiler than I would have liked. The realization is very very nicely woven in the story, save that I expected it already because of the blurb.
— Sep 19, 2013 05:44PM
Only now we find out - actually we probably will soon - the reason for the title. I fear that the blurb is actually a bigger spoiler than I would have liked. The realization is very very nicely woven in the story, save that I expected it already because of the blurb.
Alfaniel Aldavan
is 30% done
We're told early how bad is the bad guy, early enough to care for Michael to succeed. Very interesting support character.
Colorful and entertaining paragraphs of the golem's struggles with its rough golem nature.
— Sep 19, 2013 09:48AM
Colorful and entertaining paragraphs of the golem's struggles with its rough golem nature.
Alfaniel Aldavan
is 30% done
We're told early how bad is the bad guy, early enough to care for Michael to succeed. Very interesting support character.
Colorful and entertaining paragraphs of the golem's struggles with its rough golem nature.
— Sep 19, 2013 09:46AM
Colorful and entertaining paragraphs of the golem's struggles with its rough golem nature.

