Willow’s Reviews > A Deal with the Elf King > Status Update

I’m getting close to DNFing. The writing is making it really hard to like the MC. It’s trying to make her a super cool strong and independent woman who doesn’t take crap from anyone, but she’s just a self-absorbed jerk to people just doing their job and trying to help her. If the writing was self aware, it’d be fine, but it doesn’t feel like it is.

I can’t tell if I like it or not. The way characters change their attitude and reaction to things from one sentence to the next is jarring. Confident anger one sentence, while the next is pathetic crying and begging with nothing between to make it flow. I like the general idea of what’s happening, especially because I love elves, but so far it could use some more polish.

I was excited about the Elf King because the build up to him was interesting, but it all went downhill as soon as he spoke. He’s more like a whiny HS jock than a powerful and immortal king. The fact that more than one person in the audience is challenging him and not taking him seriously immediately downplays his intimidation factor. And Luke changing means nothing when we didn’t see what he’s usually like.