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Alex
is 10% done
There's a very funny moment in the 1st story that has me laughing in stitches. 3.5 star because it's funny. -points because I don't feel the best-friends vibe from the two lovers who we're told to be chums. Also, the situation in the holiday shack is not very clear. It's as though the 2 lovers are there alone. The friends are just filling in as needed by the plot.
— Oct 23, 2013 07:38AM
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Alex
is 24% done
Nice plot, but it feels more like a summary than a story in itself. Everything happens too fast. Not enough background info. Characters do not have time to develop. Gave up on last 7 pages of the probably sex scene. There's potential for expansion and more narration for the story. Until then, 2 stars.
— Oct 23, 2013 09:04AM
