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Nora
is 5% done
Resisting the urge to line edit this whole book…. Every other sentence has some kind of passive voice: was; were; had, etc. And then there’s, “Surprised, I dropped my basket on the floor.” Just say I dropped my basket. Or even better, “The basket slipped from my fingers to the floor.”
— Oct 19, 2021 03:54PM
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Nora
is 2% done
I am very turned off by multiple pages of backstory… and having a narrator tell us “who” she is instead of allowing the reader to gradually piece together the character.
— Oct 19, 2021 03:38PM
