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Laura is 61% done

Big jumps in time. The flow feels off. The likable characters have become a little whiny and you want the story to just get to the point.

— Dec 22, 2021 04:43AM

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Laura is 85% done

— Dec 22, 2021 04:30PM

Laura is 75% done

It starts to take a rather unbelievable turn. I also cannot understand why the chapters focused on Scarlett's characters POV only amounts to two pages, while Lia's are in-depth. The shift in character focus seems undeveloped, IMO. If this is supposed to be about Lia's obsession with Scarlett, than just tell the story from her point of view, otherwise it feels like both should be fleshed out.

— Dec 22, 2021 01:33PM

Laura is 67% done

— Dec 22, 2021 09:05AM

Laura is 54% done

— Dec 21, 2021 04:32AM

Laura is 44% done

— Dec 19, 2021 04:41PM

Laura is 40% done

I enjoyed the first 33%, and suddenly it start making jumps and doesn't fill in details. Perhaps those will come into focus as I continue.

I do like the characters.

— Dec 18, 2021 07:36AM

Laura is 33% done

— Dec 17, 2021 11:32AM

Laura is 29% done

— Dec 16, 2021 08:36PM

Laura is 21% done

— Dec 16, 2021 11:39AM

Laura is 9% done

— Dec 15, 2021 10:56AM