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Mel
is 10% done
1st short story:
huh. very short. story? more like a thought, but ok
— May 05, 2014 02:22AM
huh. very short. story? more like a thought, but ok
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Mel
is 90% done
4th short story:
the best so far, nice setting, was pulled into the story right from the beginning
have issues with some parts of writing style: much telling instead of showing, and while the sex scenes are quite hot, I don't like the thousand orgasms and I find the narrator's/characters' tone awkward
the pace is too fast for me, to make the story believable. but that's a problem with short stories, for me...
— May 15, 2014 12:46AM
the best so far, nice setting, was pulled into the story right from the beginning
have issues with some parts of writing style: much telling instead of showing, and while the sex scenes are quite hot, I don't like the thousand orgasms and I find the narrator's/characters' tone awkward
the pace is too fast for me, to make the story believable. but that's a problem with short stories, for me...
Mel
is 50% done
3rd short story:
nice idea with the song.
Why is it the boy's task to get the condoms? And the girl's reaction was over the top nasty. Bitch!
Don't like the education trope, though.
— May 09, 2014 08:22AM
nice idea with the song.
Why is it the boy's task to get the condoms? And the girl's reaction was over the top nasty. Bitch!
Don't like the education trope, though.
Mel
is 23% done
2nd short story:
it's a written down massage fantasy. good build-up. female as the masseuse. orgasmomania.
— May 05, 2014 01:28PM
it's a written down massage fantasy. good build-up. female as the masseuse. orgasmomania.
